Category Archives: Editing


Despite what “everyone” says, I have decided to include a prologue into my story.  It was originally written back when I was very green, so I did a major spruce-up before submitting it.

It is up for review / critique on CritiqueCircle right now, and I think it will be my submission for the live critique group next week.

Which reminds me!  If any of my two readers are in the Anderson area and interested in doing some writing and story critiquing, Carolyn and I are members of an awesome group of people that meet every other week at Panera bread.  Let me know if you are interested, and I can get you a spot.  We are a pretty small group right now, so we would love some more members.


Character interviews – Llaewyn

The dialog in Chapter 5 came out horribly.  I was so busy trying to be clever that I completely failed at making it realistic.  The conversation wanders all over the place, nobody gets to the point, and a couple of key revelations don’t even get made.


Because of this, I decided it was time to sit down with Llaewyn and have a little heart to heart chat with him.  That is, as much as a human can have with a stuck up elf.


Warning:  If you are still waiting to read chapter 5 (but didn’t already read the first draft), you might want to wait.  Basically, if you don’t know who or what Llaewyn is, and want to find out the long way, skip the rest of this post.


Otherwise, read on for how it went.


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Going too far…

Well, Chapter two is winding up in the public queue and the feedback seems to be fairly unanimous.  I have a couple people to send my follow up question to, but I am confident of the answer anyway.  Maybe they can just answer here…

In the middle of the chapter, end of scene three, I made a pretty big change to the events.  At first, I felt I was selling out on what I thought had  to happen.  When I rewrote the section, it felt like a ‘Greedo shot first’ moment.  I was wrong.

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Still Writing…

Yes, I am still alive.  The conversion from third person to first person is still ongoing, and I find that it is much easier to get into my POV character when writing in first person.

Actually, that’s a lie.  It isn’t easier.  It’s still hard to do and a pain in the butt.  But first person forces me to not ignore it and not take shortcuts.  I can’t blow past something with a convenient piece of telling.

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Chapter 1, Draft 5

I finally posted my first chapter on critique circle again.  It is a fabulous online story critiquing community that has helped me improve my writing in ways I cannot even describe.  Y’all know who you are.

To celebrate, I am posting the first scene, just under 500 words, after the break.  If you want to read more, watch for it in the public queue on critique circle.  I pushed it back in the queue, and it will be up starting August 31st!

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